Friday, 24 July 2015

Writing Competition: William

W illiam wants everything.

especially want sweets covered in sugar. He

oves 'sleep-ins' every weekends, and

oves ipad minis to play on.

I broke my ipad mini, was very sad

A nd I did not like like it that day.

mmmm not a very good choice!


From William in Room 2

3 comments:

  1. You have worked very hard William to juggle the words to make this poem. I like the way you make little comments like in the last line.

    Challenge:
    You keep chopping from talking as you - I and talking about you - William. Stick to one rather than changing in the middle. This is called first (I) or third person (William).

    Team Judge

    ReplyDelete
  2. Hello there William
    I find your poem very funny ha ha ha.
    Maybe next time you could tell me how you broke your ipad mini
    From Paris.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. I don't think you want to know how I broke my ipad mini

      Delete

Thanks for your comment. It will be posted after it has been moderated.