W illiam wants everything.
I especially want sweets covered in sugar. He
L oves 'sleep-ins' every weekends, and
L oves ipad minis to play on.
I broke my ipad mini, was very sad
A nd I did not like like it that day.
M mmmm not a very good choice!
From William in Room 2
You have worked very hard William to juggle the words to make this poem. I like the way you make little comments like in the last line.
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You keep chopping from talking as you - I and talking about you - William. Stick to one rather than changing in the middle. This is called first (I) or third person (William).
Team Judge
Hello there William
ReplyDeleteI find your poem very funny ha ha ha.
Maybe next time you could tell me how you broke your ipad mini
From Paris.
I don't think you want to know how I broke my ipad mini
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