tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2862524352162688153.post4321116816963725112..comments2015-09-07T10:26:28.310+12:00Comments on Stride Team: dragon story kelseyAllana Thttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13794373268721064965noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2862524352162688153.post-17676442166830334492015-08-30T09:08:54.495+12:002015-08-30T09:08:54.495+12:00Wow Kelsey, there is lots of writing before we eve...Wow Kelsey, there is lots of writing before we even hear about the dragon. You tried hard to build up the fear and draw us into the story.<br /><br />Challenge:<br />Read those sentences out loud. Many of them would be better and build tension by using simple sentences.<br /><br />Team JudgeAllana Thttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13794373268721064965noreply@blogger.com